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Re: Harry Cullen & Edward Potter
Gushhh....... In two words boring and lenghty
Dec 8, 2009 -
Re: Sacrifice.
This was really beautiful and poetic. But it would make more waves as a narrative poem
Dec 8, 2009 -
Re: If a day could last years.....
I loved it. It states question that could actually get one thinking. But the title doesn't fit its not attractive. Change it to something like "realities" or "facts". Every other ...
Dec 8, 2009 -
Re: I still do
Your plot is a nice one just you didn't get the right words to express and try to make it clear with few words next time. Its a poem not ...
Dec 7, 2009 -
Re: To a star
A beautiful expression of the heart, I love it. The words of line 1 stanza 1 which also reapeted in the last stanza was too cold for the poem find ...
Dec 6, 2009 -
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Keep the rythm flowing it was beautiful its what seprates poetry from an emotional writer and i say you are a POET
Dec 3, 2009 -
Re: Silent Mountain of Binarattan (legend)
Am in love the whole story it was straight and clear. In stanza the rythm was beautiful. But the abrupt end to it at the middle of the stanza made ...
Dec 3, 2009 -
Re: Strong Spirits
Your story is beautiful but ur first 2 line of stanza 2 should have conluded stanza 1 so the sad side of the stori would just start there. keep it ...
Dec 3, 2009 -
Re: The Blood, Book 1: Rubedo- Chapter 2, Third Draft
I must confess wat am mostly intrested in is beautiful stories i believe d wordings can always b worked out. And for ur story line u did just fine PM ...
Nov 26, 2009